Welcome to my blog! Today I'm posting a little early for the February WEP (Write...Edit...Publish) challenge, 28 Days.
I struggled to come up with an idea for this prompt.
Finally, it hit me and I began to write faster than I've ever written before.
I began to imagine this refugee trudging through Africa heading for an imagined freedom. I come from a country where the boats are turned back, not a good look. Nor my belief. My argument is - what did I do to be lucky enough to be born in Australia? Nothing.
I want to share the fictional Abioye's story. But I'm not sure how fictional it is...
Steps to Freedom
He took another step.
Abioye looked down. He saw red dirt, swollen,
ripped feet, and his lengthening shadow. Miles behind him was his village,
burned and looted, everyone he loved, dead. Ahead of him lay freedom.
He took another step.
As he walked, he kept his eyes
on the roadside. Already he'd been lucky enough to find a rolled-up mattress, a
cringing dog, a goatskin of water to add to his swag. He'd been getting his
swag together for weeks - a few tins of supplies the warlords dropped when they
swooped into his village and drove off into the hills, automatic rifles over
their shoulders. They stole the UN dried milk tins from the mothers’ tents,
taking from the babies' mouths. They stole all the rice, showing not a whit of
conscience for the starving villagers.
Then they took more than supplies.
When there was nothing left to steal, one day they returned and took
the lives of everyone - all the old men, all the women, all the children. The
only survivors were the young men like him, young men who roamed the sparse
land, looking for edible herbs and grasses in the desert-like landscape. He'd returned at nightfall to the
devastation. He ran. If they found him, he'd be forced to become a boy soldier
like so many others who'd disappeared.
He took another step.
Abioye felt the sob in his
throat. But he was a man. He refused to cry despite what he'd lost.
He took another step. Then
another. And another.
It was the only way forward to the north. To the boats. To the
sea. To freedom.
He'd heard stories of boats
that left from Tangier in Morocco. Boats to take him across the water to another land. A
free land. A land with food. A land with jobs. He'd work in Tangier until he saved
enough to board the boat. He'd heard stories of a man who hired young men to
escort tourists through the medinas*. He'd heard it took 28 days of working 7
days a week to save enough for his trip to the new land. To Utopia.
He took another step. His feet
pained so much he was surprised when they moved. One step. Then another agonizing
step.
The sun beat down mercilessly.
He sipped from his meager water supply. He must make it last. He might walk for
months and find no village, no water, no food.
The dog cried. What could
Abioye do? He carefully poured a mouthful of water into his palm and the
dog lapped, not wasting a drop. It licked his leg in gratitude. Abioye reached
down and patted the mutt’s head.
He took another step.
Every few steps he had to
adjust his belt. He'd lost so much weight in the past few days, the belt kept slipping down over his
hips. Once he'd forgotten and the next thing he knew his trousers were flapping
around his ankles. He laughed at the ridiculous situation, then stopped, afraid
he was hysterical from the horror he’d seen. But it didn't matter if he
laughed, cried or screamed. There was no one to hear him. He was crossing the
Sahara Desert. Alone.
The road became rocky. He
stumbled. Landed on his knees. He was sobbing now. He couldn’t help it even
though he was wasting moisture. The sun. The rough road. The hunger. The
thirst. The vision of his parents' burned bodies. His young sisters. His beloved -- How could he go on?
The dog licked his face. Abioye dragged himself to his feet. He had to go on. In memory of his father, his
mother, his two sweet sisters, his Candis who’d been promised to him when they
were both three years old. They were all alive in his head.
Abioye took another step.
He felt like he was falling, not walking. Falling, falling,
falling, but never hitting the ground.
How long had he been on the road?
Was it 28 days already? Surely, soon, he must pass by the green plants that
leaked water. Then he and the dog could drink their fill. He felt the moisture
on the tip of his tongue as he dreamed of it.
I'm so tired. I need to
sleep. On my mattress. Just for a little while.
He took another step.
Toward the edge of the road.
He mustn't stop. To stop was death. Then there'd be no one to
remember his family. No one to remember his Candis. He saw her in his mind –
her wide smile, her red lips, her teeth pearly white, dazzling him, her short black
hair cropped close to her scalp, her graceful long limbs, her colourful dresses
that brushed the ground when she walked.
I will never forget you, my eternal love.
He took another step.
Whether it took 28 days or a year, he would press on. He would
make a new life. Away from his cursed land. The land that God forgot. Maybe God
had turned his back on Africa but still lived in that new land where the boat would
take him. Maybe God would welcome him to its shores and surround him with love
and plenty. Instead of sobbing, he smiled.
He'd seen mirages in the desert many times. A mirage was coming toward him. A big green tank shimmering
through the waves. Surely it was full of water.
He took another step.
The mirage came closer. No!
It was a jeep. Soldiers in the back. Soldiers in the front. Guns pointed. At him.
He spun around and took another
step. Away. Away from the killers. Away from bondage. Away from death.
He heard the dog yelp. His
throat closed over. Turning, he saw its head a bloody mess and its eyes
stared sightless into the searing sky.
'Stop or you're next!' One of the
soldiers waved his gun, then shot a round into the air. Crack! Crack! Crack!
'Don't take another step, boy.
Or you're dead.'
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* Medina - the old walled part of a North African town.
WORD COUNT: 976
FCA
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62 comments:
So powerful, Denise!!!
I'm teary eyed. Such a sad reality for so many.
I was lucky to be born in Canada - and there isn't a day that goes by that I'm not grateful.
Can we swap Prime Ministers? Our PM (at least this week!) used to be Immigration Minister and upheld the cruel, inhumane laws re who comes to our country -- generally people with lots of money.
Oh, this is so tragic. You're right, this fiction was probably someone's horrible reality. That poor, hopeless boy.
Your writing is very evocative; it paints the picture in all its distressing colors.
I'm not sure how fictional this is either. Too many Abioyes. So heart breaking and so frustrating! Wish there was something we could do!
Great descriptive details as usual. I can completely picture this boy and his lone animal companion, his panic and despair.
That is a tough and poignant story. Very powerful.
You drew us into the poor boy's anguish, pain, and desperate hope. It is in our nature to destroy ourselves. The powerful prey on the weak, and the weak have few advocates. Great story,
Your story reaffirms just how grateful we should be for being born in countries where we still have safe haven from such widespread violence. Thanks for your WEP contribution, Denise.
It's heartbreaking to think how many people in the world live like this. I did nothing to deserve being born where I was. I was simply lucky. You did such a good job of setting the scene and showing us his pain and his strength. I only wish he could find his happy ending. Unfortunately, so many like him never do.
Such a heart-wrenching story! And even more so, knowing this type of tragedy occurs on a daily basis. Thankfully, in Canada, our government has compassion for these poor people.
Every step hurt, but he kept going through hope and hopelessness. Despite the ending, I guess I still have hope that he'll escape and make his way toward freedom again -in some way.
Beautifully written.
Thanks Tyrean. A happy ending would be nice.
Be thankful for your government for showing compassion.
I'm sure this story is true for all too many.
Thanks for your kind words LEE!
Thanks Roland. it practically wrote itself.
Thanks Ian.
Perhaps it's creative non-fiction. I've listened to so many of these stories about Sudanese refugees to know this is a common experience.
Thanks Olga. It comes from the heart...some would say a bleeding heart.
Wow. Intense writing and reading, Denise. I'm sure in many war-torn countries, the villagers are treated like this. He will have to wait until the time is right, but I hope he never gives up his dream. Liked this, and wondered if you drew on any of your traveling experiences for this.
Hi Denise,
Your story is so real. To see the cruelties that humans do to humans is unbelievable. It hurts. I like how you build up Abioye plight intermix with some background of what had happened in his village, to his family, and to the girl he loved.
Excellent story. It depicts a very real situation going on not only in Australia but in many affluent western countries.
Shalom aleichem,
Pat G
"Maybe God had turned his back on Africa but still lived in that new land where the boat would take him. Maybe God would welcome him to its shores and surround him with love and plenty." Excellent and heartbreaking, more real than fiction. Wonderful entry. Thank you for sharing it with us.
An intense and realistic entry for this theme Denise. Well done, Denise.
Powerful and heartbreaking, and as you say, all too true. We can invent distopias, but sadly there are real ones worse than we can comprehend.
Glad you liked it D.G. I drew on my experiences in Morocco, especially Tangier, right on the water opposite Spain. I can see him working in the medinas and scraping together enough to board a leaky boat but I fear the corruption would ensnare him. Sadly.
I'm glad you like the tale and the telling, Pat. All too real...
Thanks Toi. I guess these thoughts have been simmering and exploded into this tale.
Thanks Christopher!
Yes, we really don't have to invent dystopias in this world.
Wonderfully constructed and all too real. I wonder at all the pain in the world. How can people be so callous and cruel?
My goodness, I'm so teary-eyed I can barely see to type this. Well done!
Very powerful. I thought of lots more to say on the whole situation, but really, your words say it all.
Hi Denise
A powerful tale that is tragic and often true. It makes me cry for all refugees. When I worked at The University of Denver, years ago, I met a young man from Africa who was now an American Citizen. He was going to school. I did my best to welcome him and encourage him. I never forget that my own ancestors fled oppression to come across the ocean to this land. Your story is well written and captures the characters heart.
Nancy
Ah Denise, this was so real. I agree, its likely not fiction. There is such true horror in the world, and my heart weeps for tragedies such as this. How has the modern world not stamped out such terrorism?
Well written and evocative.
Wow, so tragic. You certainly have a wonderful way with words to draw emotions out of your readers.
Gulp.... how tragic. How completely sad. I HATED the ending. I wanted him to find his solace. The poor dog, such a loyal companion meeting such a cruel and heartless end. WHY? Why do situations like this continue? Why? Sadly, it comes down to Life...
VERY, VERY gripping, Denise. Well done!
So heartbreaking...
Makes you wonder, doesn't it?
Glad it had an impact on you Carrie Ann. All too true.
Not much more to say, except why is this happening?
Hi Nancy. There's books written about Sudanese walking across deserts and I guess that inspired me. Some actually ended up in Australia.
How indeed? Makes you wonder, if like the AIDS epidemic in Africa, and the Ebola virus, it is deliberate genocide. Horrific.
That warms my heart more than what I wrote, Sally. As I said, it wrote itself. But it's something I think about a lot!
Thanks Michael. Maybe he escapes?
It is indeed Bernadette.
Hi Denise - very powerful ... seeing the boats and hearing the stories that are happening all around the Mediterranean and now the English Channel; having seen 'Human Flow' the film made by the Chinese activist Ai WeiWei that I wrote about for WAWTB last June ... your 'story' brought the whole home to us who are reading as part of the IWSG and WEP. Fantastic writing ... so well done. One wonders what history will tell of this time - for all the things that are happening ... and I am so grateful to be British and born free.
Excellent entry - congratulations on the story line ... Hilary
Argh-that ending! What a powerful story. I could feel Abioye's growing desperation with every step. So tragic and sadly a reality for many people. I think you did a fantastic job of creating a really clear picture of this young man's situation and causing us to empathise with him straight away.
Thank you Anstice. I was full of desperation too and it showed, obviously.
Thanks Hilary. Yes, there's so many first-person accounts and so many conflicting opinions. This is a polarising issue for sure. Yes I'm glad I'm born free too, but as I say, I did nothing to deserve it. In another life I could be one of these desperate people finding doors slamming in their faces after all their hardship and suffering.
Very powerful stuff, Denise. I think those of us who are more fortunate (by random chance) find it hard to imagine the devastation and trauma experienced by refugees, but you get close here. I hope he does survive and finds a new start.
As do I Nick.
Powerful and distressing piece that brings out the tragic reality for to many.Too many people forget that they might have refugee or immigrant ancestry.
That would be most of us Roland. Lest we forget.
Wow. That was a very powerful story.
And it's so universal, because if he was in Mexico (which isn't, as far as I know, as bad as Africa as far as war), he could be headed to the US and dealing with a potential wall and the haters with it. *sigh*
Really great and powerful story.
Thanks JLenni. Much the same scenario for sure.
Poignant. Really hit close to home, Denise...
I also ask the question: maybe God has turned his back on Africa? There is just too much poverty and suffering on this continent.
Far too much.
However, I feel like one of the fortunate ones since I have a good job, a home, food, opportunities to travel, to progress...
The Rape of Africa is a seeping sore. Have you read the Poisonwood Bible by Barbara Kinsolver? The big guys have done a good job of doing her over. I'm so glad for you and those like you who have security despite this. Onward and upward...
The book is somewhere on my to-read list.
I'll have to push it to the top. A priority read.
You will be riveted to every page.
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