Hello writer friends!
Even though it's A - Z month, IWSG is going ahead. This gives me the opportunity to tell you...
...I finally finished my first novel! It rocked in at nearly 60,000 words. I have four other novels in the works, but I decided to finish my 2013 NaNo project - Fijian Princess, a romance set naturally enough, in Fiji (where I spent six wonderful weeks house-sitting for Nas Dean). I've always been a stickler for writing about what you know, or finding out what you don't.
Being a snarky editor myself, I didn't want to send my novel off into the world with mistakes in structure, formatting, and egad, even a typo or two, so I went the Manuscript Assessor route. For those who haven't heard of this option, this is an editing type of person who goes over your manuscript with a pair of fine tweezers, plucking out those unnecessary bits, finding those bits you have in the wrong place, then writing an 8 - 10 page explanation of the tweezing, with suggestions on how to wax lyrical.
The Assessor I chose, Louise Cusack is a much-published Australian (local) author whose writing workshops I have attended, and who knows her way around Harlequin et al. Louise doesn't just want your manuscript, she wants the Synopsis of your novel and the Query too. She will advise on both of those pesky little items.
I've struggled with the 'Dreaded Synopsis' for years, which may account for my lack of submissions. But if I wanted Louise's professional eye over my synopsis, I had just a week to get it done. Which I did. But then she asked me to cut it from nearly 2,000 words to 500. Egad! I thought all sense of the story would be obliterated with such severe culling, but there's still enough remaining to get the drift.
I found it useful to read others' synopses while struggling with my own, so am posting my final 500 worder. I hasten to add that I haven't had feedback from Louise on this. It may royally suck.
All obstacles overcome, they make passionate love in Adi’s room. Bosco gifts Adi a sperm whale bone, the traditional Fijian symbol for trust. The engagement ring will follow. They both find their happily ever after.
LINKS FOR WRITING SYNOPSES:
http://www.kathycarmichael. com/articles-and-seminars/ articles-and-workshops/ romance-synopsis/short- romance-synopsis-workshop/
http://nicolamarsh.blogspot. com.au/2009/08/write-whisper- sample-synopsis.html?m=1
http://www.vivianbeck.com/ writing/5_steps_to_writing_a_ synopsis.htm
http://www.bethanderson- hotclue.com/workshops/writing- the-tight-synopsis/
Even though it's A - Z month, IWSG is going ahead. This gives me the opportunity to tell you...
...I finally finished my first novel! It rocked in at nearly 60,000 words. I have four other novels in the works, but I decided to finish my 2013 NaNo project - Fijian Princess, a romance set naturally enough, in Fiji (where I spent six wonderful weeks house-sitting for Nas Dean). I've always been a stickler for writing about what you know, or finding out what you don't.
Being a snarky editor myself, I didn't want to send my novel off into the world with mistakes in structure, formatting, and egad, even a typo or two, so I went the Manuscript Assessor route. For those who haven't heard of this option, this is an editing type of person who goes over your manuscript with a pair of fine tweezers, plucking out those unnecessary bits, finding those bits you have in the wrong place, then writing an 8 - 10 page explanation of the tweezing, with suggestions on how to wax lyrical.
The Assessor I chose, Louise Cusack is a much-published Australian (local) author whose writing workshops I have attended, and who knows her way around Harlequin et al. Louise doesn't just want your manuscript, she wants the Synopsis of your novel and the Query too. She will advise on both of those pesky little items.
I've struggled with the 'Dreaded Synopsis' for years, which may account for my lack of submissions. But if I wanted Louise's professional eye over my synopsis, I had just a week to get it done. Which I did. But then she asked me to cut it from nearly 2,000 words to 500. Egad! I thought all sense of the story would be obliterated with such severe culling, but there's still enough remaining to get the drift.
I found it useful to read others' synopses while struggling with my own, so am posting my final 500 worder. I hasten to add that I haven't had feedback from Louise on this. It may royally suck.
Fijian Princess
Bosco Brookes wants Adi Vakalevulevu. Adi Vakalevulevu wants Bosco Brookes, but he’s from another
world. Will their differences prevent them from living their love story? Will
the power of their shared passion overcome all obstacles?
Thirty-year-old
Bosco Brookes, confirmed bachelor and millionaire architect, arrives on Fiji’s Italal
Island for his sister Callis’ wedding. He has two passions in his life – being Callis’
‘father’, and making millions. But when he meets Adi Vakalevulevu, the Fijian Princess, she becomes another passion. However, he can’t
have Adi and his future resort. But
Bosco always gets what he wants.
Adi Kaca
Rani Vakalevulevu is twenty-three years old. Her life has been one of
‘duty’ – to her father the chieftain, then to her betrothed Ethan Naevo. Ethan
makes her his partner in Italal Lagoon Resort to keep her close while he
pressures her to marry him. Adi forgets all about Ethan when she finds the handsome
Australian Bosco Brookes mesmerised by her. She would love a happily-ever-after
with Bosco, but if he finds out her secret, Adi knows he will fly out of her
life as quickly as he flew in.
Bosco
is captivated by Adi; he is Adi’s fairytale hero, come to rescue her from her
life of duty. Bosco’s original plan is to seduce Adi, but his deepening
attraction surprises the playboy; he wants more than a casual fling.
Adi can’t believe her luck -
attracting such a dashing tycoon. He’s out of her league, but it can’t hurt to
indulge in a little fantasy, can it? Adi and Bosco’s flirting starts at the bar that first night and continues at the Kava party. Adi’s flirting stops cold with Bosco’s faux pas. She also learns he has a girlfriend, Australian
supermodel Frieda Adolphson. Just Adi’s luck!
Next
morning, Adi accepts Bosco’s fumbling apology. Bosco keeps quiet about his
planned resort, keeps quiet about Frieda, but he can’t keep quiet about the potential
disaster that looms over the resort thanks to Ethan Naevo.
On a
day trip to dive at Uknan Island, Bosco and Adi’s mutual passion for each other
is uncovered. Callis nearly drowns; Bosco hits rock bottom - he’s failed his
baby sister.
Bosco’s
life is changing; he can’t come to grips with the new direction his life is taking.
Bosco and Adi make love on a mountain top, make love on a
stormy beach – metaphors for the highs and lows of their relationship.
The wedding
and fist fight with Ethan behind him, Bosco’s quest leads him to the highlands
in search of Adi who has disappeared. Here in her village, the crisis and resolution of the novel occur.
He endures a hazing, then surprises Adi in her father’s bure. Adi confesses her
lack of trust in assuming Bosco will reject her once he knows she’s the mother
of Ethan’s child. Bosco, after his initial rage over her lack of trust, confesses
his love.
All obstacles overcome, they make passionate love in Adi’s room. Bosco gifts Adi a sperm whale bone, the traditional Fijian symbol for trust. The engagement ring will follow. They both find their happily ever after.
Forget the query. I ran out of time...
- What do you think? Does it make you want to read the story? That is the whole point of a synopsis. The editor asks: Do I want to read more? Uh uh...nah...or...Send me the first three chapters, and quick!
http://www.kathycarmichael.
http://nicolamarsh.blogspot.
http://www.vivianbeck.com/
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