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Wow! I missed last month's IWSG cuz I was just so busy with everything writing related. Much the same this month. But I'll answer the second half of the suggested question - what delights you (about writing). I love everything about writing except sweating over the first draft - that's where my critique partners come in, but once I have my story down, it delights me to rewrite as many times as it takes, then share with betas and editors. But, added to that, I love that I'm a member of the blogosphere where we love to interact and help each other. So, when Damyanti asked me to put an article together on self-publishing, I was less than keen as I'm pretty new to the game, but I'm glad I chose to go ahead and do something for Damyanti who gets so many queries from her followers about self-publishing...so...Damyanti is hosting me on her site. After you read my entry for WEP, Damyanti and I would be so happy if you drop by to read my article, A Beginner's Guide to Self-Publishing. Add to the conversation!
Now, let's get WEP underway!
Welcome to WEP's final challenge for the year of 2021, Year of the Art. We've all thoroughly enjoyed being inspired by art prompts and honestly, I'm a bit sad that it's over. But, good news, 2022 is the Year of Music, where we're inspired to write by music titles and lyrics. Super exciting!
The Year of Music kicks off in February 2022.
Let's get down to the Art...Caravaggio's Narcissus. In my story, I've gone for Narcissus and Narcissa. I've strayed into vampire territory. Couldn't restrain myself.
I hope you enjoy my flash! Those with sharp memories will recall I've taken the bones of a previous WEP entry and with some tweaking it was perfect for the challenge.
And a new innovation at WEP is that we write our own taglines - such good practise for submitting to agents/publishers/magazines/on book covers ... so ...
TAGLINE: Be careful what you wish for; you might just get it.
A Little
Reflection Can’t Hurt
In perfect synchronicity, in the perfect silence
of the night, two imposing figures ran side by side, shooting like arrows through
trees and undergrowth. Moonbeams shone upon them, bathing them in surreal light.
Her name was Alessandra. His was Eduardo.
Eduardo took Alessandra’s hand and tugged her to a halt. ‘Before
we feed, let’s go to our favorite place.’ Eduardo pointed deeper into the
forest, where an abandoned track led away from the highway. The old path was
pitted, potholed and pathetic, but it didn’t faze them. Their swift feet flew
above the earth, propelled them into the sky whenever they craved the sheer
joy of using their newfound powers.
Alessandra jerked his arm, dragged him under an overhanging branch
of a Downy Birch. Despite her awesome powers of strength, intuition, enhanced
sight and hearing, she was always nervous when Eduardo invited her to their
favorite place. But her nerves coupled with a frisson of excitement. She
thought of saying “no” for a nanosecond, but she hated to disappoint Eduardo
after he’d been so good to her. ‘Oh let’s.’ She sucked in a deep breath. ‘I must
try one more time before I give up.’
Eduardo wrapped his arm around her shoulders, drew her so close she
felt his marble-hard body pressed against hers. ‘You are the most beautiful
thing that ever happened to me, my darling,’ he said. ‘I’m so glad you’re mine
for eternity. What a gift I have been given. I always loved Christmas in my
human form, now Christmas comes every day I spend with you.’
Alessandra knew he was buttering her up to ease the disappointment
she must surely feel when they reached the magical place. ‘You are the most
perfect gift ever, Eduardo.’
As she ran, Alessandra’s mind returned to that night when
everything changed…
~*~
…She was out on the town, such as it was. Her boyfriend hovered
attentively, plying her with white sauvignon blanc until the rough
edges of her dissatisfaction blurred.
Why are you so unhappy? he'd asked. What more
could you want? Your life is perfect.
That’s what you think.
Over the rim of her glass, her eyes flew from her boring boyfriend
and locked with a new arrival. Helloooo stranger. Few strangers came to
this weird little island plonked in the middle of the North Sea. In his Savile
Row suit and designer haircut, he oozed glitz and glamour.
And excitement.
As he stared at her, trembling possessed her whole body like an
alien force had taken her over. Her boredom with her ho-hum life on the island
was about to end. He was "big city". Glasgow? Aberdeen? Her knight in
shining armor had come to rescue her.
The stranger did indeed rescue her from her life.
She’d clutched her glass of white wine until the stem broke,
cutting the tip of her finger. Seawater jumped clear across the harbor wall and
crashed against the glass windows. She sucked her finger and wondered if the glass might
shatter and tip them all into the North Sea.
She thought it was part of the game when he ran her from the pub,
covering her with his fancy cloak and took her driving into the forest in his
sleek black Maserati. She’d never seen such a car. A change from clanking old
tractors driven by dour farmers.
She thought it was part of the game when he drew her close, sucked her bleeding wound then threaded his fingers through her hair. Her whole body
shivered as he murmured endearments. Oooohhhh.
She thought it was part of the game when she felt a strange
sensation where his lips touched her neck.
But she knew it wasn’t a game when his teeth bit her throat. ‘Come,
my lifeless bride. Come away with me. Be mine eternally.’
Her heart hammered. Her throat burned. Her body trembled.
Too late.
The myths about strange creatures who lurked on the island were
true. Why had she dismissed them like she dismissed everything about her home? But
who’d expect one of those creatures would drive a Maserati?
But thankfully, her boyfriend, Eduardo, had followed them in his beat-up Toyota.
He’d wrenched open the Maserati door, dragged Niccolò off her neck,
pulled him outside.
Niccolò had spung up, pounded a fist into Eduardo’s temple. While he lay unconscious, and while Alessandra lay inert inside the car, Niccolò had drunk from Eduardo, then roared into the night after tossing her on the ground.
Gods be praised, her boyfriend followed her into
the Otherworld.
~*~
Through mountains of musky leaves, she and Eduardo ran, hummus
flying around their feet. Occasionally, just for thrills, they flew to the
treetops, using their sharp vision to check out the distant landscape of gray
sea and green hills, so beloved.
Alessandra smelt it before she saw it.
Their special stream. They knelt before the pristine water and
played the game. Would it be different this time?
Pushing their faces close to the water, they tried, they really
did. But no. Nothing. No image. No reflection. No chance of being Narcissus or Narcissa
even with all their extraordinary powers.
Disappointed, Alessandra plunged her face into the water. Do I
even exist? ‘Ohuhuh…aagh...’ Electricity shot through her body
while Eduardo held her while she trembled with shock.
When the trembling ceased, Alessandra sighed. ‘Perhaps one day
I’ll see my reflection.’ She bent down and scooped a handful of shimmering
water, let it trail through her fingers. She might be slowly forgetting what
she looked like, but she’d never forget the past events that brought her to a
place where her reflection didn't reflect.
‘See yourself through my eyes, my love.’ With his long fingers, Eduardo
traced the shape of her face. ‘Your hair is like black silk, and it is my
never-ending thrill to run my fingers through it; your face is a heart, so dear
to me as you gaze at me with your heart in your eyes. Your lips are soft and
red,’ he followed their outline with a fingertip, ‘while your ears are two
delicate white shells attuned to my love words.’
Alessandra was moved beyond words. ‘My love, I see myself reflected
in your words. What need have I for any other?’
_____________________________________________________
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57 comments:
I remember these 2!! I love the re-use and the new addition! Great job :)
Thanks Jemi. I guess it wasn't that long ago...:-)
Everlasting love? Or will Eduardo bore her again in the months/years to come?
A great reworking.
Yes good question, Sue. She's a bit easily bored, but maybe with her new life, it's harder to be bored, LOL.
That was a good take Denise with the vampire and all the gore. I also enjoyed your guide to self publishing on Damyanti's blog. The line up for 2022 WEP looks so interesting already.And I will be trying to write this Dec too. Inspired by your day one entry.
-Sonia
Interesting twist! I didn't expect the boring boyfriend and the dashing vampire to be one and the same. Let's hope he doesn't revert. ☺ I read and bookmarked your article at Damyanti's. Next year's themes are perfect for this music fanatic!
Glad you liked mystory.I'm glad you like our prompts for next year Sonia. I hope you checked out those FB groups from the article.
Glad I caught you with the twist. Knew you'd love the new prompts.
Great story! Vampires that can't see their own reflection- perfect for this.
https://dencovey.blogspot.com/2021/11/wepff-narcissus-by-caravaggio-my.html?m=1
The link took me to a blank post. I hit home and got here. Just a heads up that it isn't working right on mobile.
Thanks so much for letting me know Jamie. Fixed. Glad you enjoyed my story.
I struggle through the first draft too. This is a great story. I didn't see your twist coming.
I enjoyed the twist here. And a nice mix of darkness and romance.
Hi Denise!
I always enjoy your Vampire stories. This one has a wonderful twist with the vanity to want to see her reflection and can't... Well done! As always, you descriptions are wonderful and setting it in modern times was also another fun twist....
I read your post at Damyanti's. It was great! And your Vampire story here today is too. This was a perfect one for the theme. Can't wait to read the others.
Loved the vampire theme! And that she didn't have to see to believe.
I read you article but couldn't post a comment. Computer issues again, I'll figure it one of these days! LOL
I'm looking forward to next years challenges. Such fun!
Happy holidays, multiple blog participant! May all the delights and none of the stresses come your way -
Glad someone shares my angst over the first draft. I know some writers who love that dirty draft. I can never wait to rewrite it!
I like that, Nick. 'a nice mix of darkness and romance.'
Thanks Michael. Seems most like the twist.
Yes, thanks Lee, for coming by at Damyanti's earlier. I think the prompts next year will hit a chord with many.
I'm glad you read it. As you see, D edited it. Yes, 2022 will be fun, except for those things which are not.
Thank you. I return your good wishes.
That's me! The first draft is the worst.
Your article at Damy's was good.
I remember your story and the tweets do make it perfect for Narcissus. Poor Alessandra, never again able to admire her reflection. A horrible catastrophe for a narcist.
I'll go check out your post now.
Nancy
I couldn't find the link to your article.
This writing group online is certainly very supportive.
I couldn't have published without my critique partners. Kudos to them and to your partners for helping you. Congrats on the article--I'll check it out. I love the musical idea for WEP 2022. And to start off with a Beatles song is perfect. Looking forward to 2022!
Maybe it is good they can't see their reflections after they turn into vampires. More incentive to pay attention to things that are more important than outward appearance.
That's true Olga.
It's written twice near my cover, Nancy. Here it is again.
https://www.damyantiwrites.com/2021/11/23/self-publishing/22/00/03/12069/guest-post/damyantig/
It certainly is.
We are all pretty excited to kick off with the Beatles next year! Be lovely to see you there!
And critique partners are awesome!
Hi Denise - this is fun to read ... and to know there are others and will be more based around Eduardo and Alessandro - a series, or set of short stories. Your mind always leads us to interesting outcomes - poor souls locked together.
Your article over at Damyanti's was really good and will be so useful to so many. Self-publishing ... so many aspects to be considered.
All the best with your Paris book - love the colour ... take care and have a peaceful season - cheers Hilary
Thanks so much Hilary. You are so supportive 💗
Great story. So glad you shared it with us. I love the concept of using song titles as inspiration for the WEP next year. That should be fun.
Love that last line!
This is such a clever take on the prompt! You did a wonderful job of setting the scene, and the ending was perfect!
Glad you like the song titles' prompts for next year. I know it will be super fun.
Thanks Holly.
Thanks Laura. I'm glad you liked it.
Great use of the trope about vampires and mirrors :D. I hope they have a good… non-life?
I love your take on it, making them vampires who can't see their reflections at all. A narcissist without a mirror. But Eduardo IS her mirror, and confirms what she wants to hear.
A brilliant reworking, Denise! And such a clever use of the prompt! - each being the mirror for the other, without access to their own reflection. I hope Alessandra will be happy in her vampire state with her boyfriend than she was before. :D
Denise, your story is inspired! I loved the twists and turns you put us through, and that in a short 1040 words.
Brilliant Denise. Couldn't be more perfect for the prompt! So round. Loved it from start to finish and around all the twists!
Loved the article on self publishing. I'm right at the beginning of all this, so it is tremendously helpful, if daunting!
Hi Denise!
I enjoyed your informative post over at Damyanti's site.
A Little Reflection Can’t Hurt is a great story with a clever twist! Let's hope Alessandra and Eduardo can dig deeper, move beyond the outward appearance, and stay together in this everlasting vampiric world.
I have to mention that I love your alliterative writing “pitted, potholed and pathetic,” and a host of other alliterative phrases. I love alliteration.
Have a Merry Christmas and a Peaceful & Prosperous New Year!
Ah, I remember this. A lovely way to tailor it to the prompt.
Thanks Bernadette.
Thanks for reading the article, Michelle! Glad that you liked my vampire tale. Yeah, I love alliteration, too.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you too Michy!
Thanks Carole for your generous comments. Glad you liked the article. There's so much more to it all, of course, but you learn as you go on this one!
Thanks Kalpana. High praise coming from such a great writer!
Thanks Nila. Let's just hope she is happy!
Thanks Shannon. Was fun to write, too.
Excellent entry. There's something about vampires that goes hand in hand with narcissism.
I'm enjoying #WRiTECLUB2021 over at DL Hammons blog. The entries are fun to read and vote on with feedback.
Plus, I'm currently reading Patricia Lynne's Being Human. (The IWSG Goodread's book club choice for December.)
And I'm scheduling debut author interviews at Operation Awesome.
I hope you have some fun plans for the rest of 2021. 🎄🎆⛸🥁✉🥂⛄ May your days ahead be merry and filled with positive experiences.
Eduardo is a devoted boyfriend. I agree with J. Lenni that narcissism and vampirism are coupled. Although I generally despise what I see in the mirror, I think I'd find it annoying not to be able to see my own reflection. I suppose a vampire's only recourse is to have lots of portraits painted!
Happy holidays if you celebrate them. "See" you next year!
Thanks Cie. I do celebrate. Thank you. See you next year!
You sound busy J Lenni. Go for it. Thanks for the Christmas wishes. Same to you! Hope 2022 is awesome for you!
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