Hi Denise - this is sad at the horror, while yet ... over time and with luck things can come right - but after that terror. Domestic abuse is just awful ... thank you for reminding us.
Also I was pleased to read about the artist ... I'll check him out.
A powerful and empowering story. Your imagery and descriptions are excellent. Thank you for reminding us of this current terror as we go about our western lives.
"Why didn’t she do something? Anything … But her mother was as helpless as she." - Why Emma expected her mother to do something? Why didn't she hold her father's belt and yanked it hard so that her father fell? She appeared brave enough to break the window and reach Ahmed/ Ahmet (not sure which spelling is your choice Denise) whom she knew for how long has not been revealed in the story nor was Ahmed's character. Also it is unclear why Emma returned to the house she left. It's good to know that all men aren't as monstrous as Emma's father, at least her love seems not.
Denise I loved how you painted that beautiful picture with your words of Emma's house that finally fell like skittles. I cringed at how her father abused her. At first I thought it was going to be about the couple but I liked how you reflected on the helplessness of the mother. In several Asian countries mothers are a hapless lot. Though it seems to be getting better. Sonia from https://soniadogra.com
This is a wonderful take on the prompt. Dangerous though it was, I'm glad she chose freedom. It's sad that far too many people around the world face similar circumstances.
The prison house - rocks itself into the sea. I enjoyed the tale of Emma and Ahmed. Arranged marriage is anathema to me as well, even though I live in a country where it's still the norm and even young people accept it as such. Great story Denise. I liked this line "Waves slapped her face, but fell more gently than her father's hands." They made me shudder. Good take on the prompt.
I'm glad she found the courage to be with the man she loved. Your descriptions, as always, are beyond brilliant. 'Moon rose and sat at her window' just loved that imagery!
Escape is one thing, forgetting is another. It's a great story, but you are the expert at great stories! Beautiful, emotional, a perfect telling! Thank you! Freedom Morning was the perfect prompt this month, timely!
A powerful and emotional love story. Funnily, you could have submitted this for the next round's theme and it would have fitted just as well - the "Great Wave" symbolizing her father's inhuman abuse that she has been rescued from. Well done.
Her escape is very fortunate. The truth of this tale is terrible and sad. I wish the ending happened for more women/girls! Excellent job of capturing her desperate situation and her bittersweet relief.
I'm here for the monthly IWSG and didn't expect to encounter such a lovely WEP story right in tune with the theme on several levels, for our heroine was able to escape and build a new life, hopefully healed by love. Sometimes I think those scars from parental neglect and abuse never really go away, but we adapt and persevere. Your story brings hope to the reader as well.
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Thank you.
Here's to happy endings, and the redemptive power of tears and understanding.
Hi Denise - this is sad at the horror, while yet ... over time and with luck things can come right - but after that terror. Domestic abuse is just awful ... thank you for reminding us.
Also I was pleased to read about the artist ... I'll check him out.
Thanks for adding me in ... all the best - Hilary
Excellent! Well done. Too many women from western cultures are unaware of how fortunate we are.
Shalom aleichem
What a beautiful story. I loved how she was brave enough to fight for her freedom.
A powerful and empowering story. Your imagery and descriptions are excellent. Thank you for reminding us of this current terror as we go about our western lives.
Oh, my heart. You know how to wrench my emotions in ALL the directions, Denise!
"Why didn’t she do something? Anything … But her mother was as helpless as she." - Why Emma expected her mother to do something? Why didn't she hold her father's belt and yanked it hard so that her father fell?
She appeared brave enough to break the window and reach Ahmed/ Ahmet (not sure which spelling is your choice Denise) whom she knew for how long has not been revealed in the story nor was Ahmed's character.
Also it is unclear why Emma returned to the house she left.
It's good to know that all men aren't as monstrous as Emma's father, at least her love seems not.
Denise I loved how you painted that beautiful picture with your words of Emma's house that finally fell like skittles. I cringed at how her father abused her. At first I thought it was going to be about the couple but I liked how you reflected on the helplessness of the mother. In several Asian countries mothers are a hapless lot. Though it seems to be getting better.
Sonia from https://soniadogra.com
Great story and a fantastic heroine.
A sad tale that is too often played out in real life. I'm glad she found her freedom and was able to join the love of her life.
Nancy
P.S. You have both Ahmed and Ahmet in the story.
This is a wonderful take on the prompt. Dangerous though it was, I'm glad she chose freedom. It's sad that far too many people around the world face similar circumstances.
That's so true, Laura.
Thanks Nancy.
Glad you like her Olga.
Glad you liked it Sonia.
Glad you were wrenched Jemi!
Yes Toi, so many don't share our freedoms.
Thanks Natalie. Glad you saw her bravery.
That's so true, Pat.
The prison house - rocks itself into the sea. I enjoyed the tale of Emma and Ahmed. Arranged marriage is anathema to me as well, even though I live in a country where it's still the norm and even young people accept it as such. Great story Denise. I liked this line "Waves slapped her face, but fell more gently than her father's hands." They made me shudder. Good take on the prompt.
It is one of my hot button issues, Hilary. Makes me fume.
Yes I'll drink to that Sue!
Very lyrical writing. The story was sad in some ways that people have to fight so hard.
I'm glad she found the courage to be with the man she loved. Your descriptions, as always, are beyond brilliant. 'Moon rose and sat at her window' just loved that imagery!
Escape is one thing, forgetting is another. It's a great story, but you are the expert at great stories! Beautiful, emotional, a perfect telling! Thank you!
Freedom Morning was the perfect prompt this month, timely!
An emotional tale about the dangers and thrills of love colliding with love's potential to heal a person. Well done, Denise.
A powerful and emotional love story. Funnily, you could have submitted this for the next round's theme and it would have fitted just as well - the "Great Wave" symbolizing her father's inhuman abuse that she has been rescued from. Well done.
Very emotional.
Her escape is very fortunate. The truth of this tale is terrible and sad. I wish the ending happened for more women/girls! Excellent job of capturing her desperate situation and her bittersweet relief.
Excellent post! It isn't easy to escape abuse. Glad that the main character was brave enough to flee to freedom and love.
J Lenni Dorner~ Co-host of the #AtoZchallenge, Debut Author Interviewer, Reference& Speculative Fiction Author
A very powerful metaphor for escaping from the chains that confine the mind long after the physical circumstance has passed.
Oh, how wonderful. The ebb and flow of the emotions in the story matched the sea, too. Beautifully written and so poignant.
Jemima
A difficult topic, but very well managed! Kudos. And more kudos for the badge and theme. Excellent.
Beautifully written. And the emotions shone off the page.
Thanks Lee.
I'm here for the monthly IWSG and didn't expect to encounter such a lovely WEP story right in tune with the theme on several levels, for our heroine was able to escape and build a new life, hopefully healed by love. Sometimes I think those scars from parental neglect and abuse never really go away, but we adapt and persevere. Your story brings hope to the reader as well.
Thanks Beth. I didn't get to the IWSG this month. I started a post, but didn't finish.
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