Hello there!
I know I'm a week early for the IWSG, but what the heck. It fits in perfectly with the WEP special challenge, so I'm all over it.
Alex Newton (K-lytics |
So here I go...
It feels so good to be writing again. So if you missed my last post, you'll know I'm back after a long hiatus. I'm the epitome of the #IWSG. I feel like I've forgotten everything about publishing etc, but am glad that the writing is still there. And I'm starting back with #flashfiction, my favorite. If you missed it, WEP is back for an October special challenge for all those who've been missing the motivation to write out of your comfort zone.
The idea for my WEP entry hit me when I recollected Oscar Wilde’s quote –
“A life without love is like a sunless garden.” I thought about the
possibilities, and this is what I came up with.
A Sunless Garden
A Sunless Garden
The city of New Orleans moved to its chaotic rhythm,
indifferent to the hollow ache nestled inside Clara's chest. How many people
were like her, going through the motions but not really living? You’d never
know with all the color, noise and mayhem surrounding her. She was an empty
shell, nothing left inside but cold and desolation.
Completely out of sync with her city.
She sat at her favorite café window, mesmerized by rain
streaking down the glass. Every drop felt like a tear she couldn’t cry, every
shadow on the pavement outside a whisper of something lost.
"More coffee?" The waiter, his smile mechanical, held up the steaming pot of darkness. Clara liked his offish
manner. No chatting. Just isolation.
She nodded, not caring that she hated the bitter taste. The
warmth it gave was all she craved, a small comfort in a world grown cold.
As she sipped her third brew for the day, a glint caught her
eye—outside, across the street, a man stood under the awning of her favorite bookstore,
Dead End Books. His eyes locked on her, not with the casual gaze of a passer-by,
but with a dark, knowing intensity. Clara’s breath hitched. There was something
wrong about him, something familiar, yet utterly alien.
She looked away quickly, her heart pounded, the air in the
café suffocated her. Her breath was choking gasps. The last time she had felt
that sensation was with Thomas, her late husband. The same heart-racing fear masquerading as love. What torture had he planned for her when he
returned from work and decided he hated the meal she’d prepared? But Thomas had
died three years ago, and the pitiful trickling of love that had once warmed
her world had died with him.
She’d always been lonely. Thomas was her antidote to
loneliness, her lifeboat, until she came to prefer loneliness to her life with
him.
Guilt tore at her. Why did she do what he asked right to the
end? How could she administer that lethal dose that took him from the world?
When she refused, he cursed and ranted, spittle flying in her face. Then he
said his final words – “I’ve never loved you. Truth is, I’ve hated you for a
long time.”
He was taunting her. He always taunted her to get what he
wanted. She shouldn’t have done it. But she gave him what he wanted as she
always did.
As the needle pricked his arm, his eyes glinted, triumphant.
To the last you obey me, they said.
Now, her life was a sunless garden—dead flowers choked by
weeds, nothing but shadows.
She scanned the street, but the man had disappeared as
quickly as he’d appeared. Yet unease gnawed at her. She left notes on the table,
rushed from the café, her heels clicking on the wet sidewalk in a hurried,
hollow rhythm.
As she rounded the corner, she felt it again—that eerie
presence.
Not someone.
Something.
She spun around, but the street was empty. The hairs on the
back of her neck stood on end. As drops of rain fell on her head, the world
seemed to warp, grow darker, the sky a bruised gray that smothered the last
vestige of light.
She sped down the bright, graffitied alley close to her
apartment, but the walls were black towers, pressing against her. Every
footstep echoed twice. Someone was walking behind her.
She stopped.
Turned around.
The man. At the far end of the alley. Shrouded in shadow. He
stood, legs planted apart, arms raised in the air like a boxer ready to
administer the first blow. His eyes glowed faintly through the shadow, the way
Thomas’s had the night he died—distant, lost to the sickness that had taken him,
yet triumphant when she carried out his bidding.
"Who are you?" Clara demanded, her voice
trembling.
The man stepped forward, walking slowly in her direction, and
with every step, the world dimmed. The lights flickered, street traffic
silenced, even the rain stopped mid-air, frozen in time.
"You … know … who … I … am."
Her heart raced, the truth clawed at her mind. This wasn’t
real. Couldn’t be.
"Thomas? But you’re dead.”
The figure smiled, but there was no joy in it.
"Not exactly."
His voice was Thomas’s, but colder, laced with something
darker, more threatening.
"You let me go, Clara. You killed me. Now you have no
one. Instead, you’re living in this sunless garden of grief, and you’ll never escape."
Clara took a step back, her pulse a wild drumbeat in her
ears. "This can’t be. You’re not him."
The figure stopped before her, so close she could smell his
stench. Tilting his head, he growled like an attack dog.
"No. I am what’s left. The emptiness. The darkness you
invited in when you let love go."
“What we had wasn’t love. You hated me. You taunted me. You
beat me.”
Her back hit the alley wall. She was trapped by shadows.
"What … what do you want?"
His eyes glowed brighter, the alley swallowed the last fragment
of light. "I want what you took from me. What you buried with your cold heart."
“My heart was never cold. That was all you. Despite how you
treated me, I loved you.”
His teeth grimaced, rotten and yellow. His face in hers, his
spiney hands encircled her neck.
“But I never loved you, Clara. I pitied you. Your life has
always been a sunless garden.”
He squeezed, harder, harder.
Her eyes bulged, opened long enough to see the triumph in
his.
And then the world went black.
In the silence, broken only by the inhuman sounds emanating
from her throat, she realized the truth. Love was not the sun. It was the
garden. Without it, the shadows had come for her.
TAGLINE:
The scourge of Domestic Violence reaches beyond the grave.
Aren't you sickened by those horrific stories of domestic violence and despite the money thrown at the scourge by the government, the violence gets worse. And I don't believe in judging women for staying in a toxic marriage - not everyone has an 'out' and some are kept in this situation by crippling emotional needs.
I wanted to show how far reaching domestic violence is - it reaches beyond the grave.
Thanks for visiting and reading. It's good to be back to blogging!
The awesome co-hosts for the October 2 posting of the IWSG are Nancy Gideon, Jennifer Lane, Jacqui Murray, and Natalie Aguirre!
44 comments:
Dark, frightening and a part of me recognises truth in it. Which adds to my discomfort.
Dracula! Good choice.
Once a writer, always a write!. Done to a turn as always. There's is an exponential rise in crimes against women. Been on my mind too, you know why.
Wonderful you are writing again. I've always loved Dracula and vampire stories.
WOW! Powerful! And oh so true!
So happy to see you back at it. So happy to be back myself. LOL
Happy Halloween!!
There are worse things than death awaiting the living: there are withered hearts and grasping fingers. Fine, fine writing, Denise.
I'm so glad you're back. This was such a creepy, dark story but I see the truth in it.
That's the thing isn't it Sue? Too true. Thanks for visiting. Hope you're doing well.
No one beats Dracula.
Crimes against women just keep increasing. Very sad when one woman a week gets murdered in Oz by her 'loving' partner.
I'm with you, Go Dracula!
It's great to be back writing horror stories that's for sure. Coming across to read your first poem shortly.
Sad but true. Can't wait to be creeped out by your story Roland. Good to have you!
Sadly Natalie, too much truth.
Good to read your flash again, Denise. Domestic violence is a living horror, the ghosts of which haunt one for life. A powerful choice for the theme and crafted so well.
Sonia
That was truly a scary story.
Hi Denise - I'm so pleased WEP is back ... mine will go up later in the week. Also I thought of The Canterville Ghost - a light version of a ghost story - by Oscar Wilde though ... Dracula - yes horrifying thought.
Your A Sunless Garden ... yes domestic violence is awful ... but this is so well written - and if one's experienced that sort of grief with monstrous treatment I can believe it'll reach from beyond the grave.
It certainly reaches forever ... the Caged Bird WEP was when I wrote mine on domestic violence ...
You've brought back so much ... and now there's modern slavery too .. how people can treat people without an iota of respect ... excellent - and really 'cruelly' told ... I hope it gets published somewhere.
Good to see you back too - all the best as the healing continues on - cheers Hilary
Dracula is always good at being scary. Nice story for your horrorfest challenge. Often times, reality is much scarier than fiction. There is so much truth here.
Always good to take a break, and even better to get back in the saddle of writing again. Your story shows you haven't lost your touch during the interim. Dracula is likely the face of spooky stories. My all-time favs are the chicken skin tales of marching spirits and ghostly appearances in Hawaii.
Oo, Dracula, great choice.
That was awesome, Denise!!! Totally creeped out.
Very scary, Denise! Perfect for this WEP. I'll have my entry in later tonight. Love the WEP fun. Great to have it back.
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Very well done, and you are so right about the reach of domestic violence. I'll have my post up on Monday :)
I haven't read Dracula, but I'm sure I would be totally creeped out!
Thank you for coming back to writing, Denise. This encourages me in unexpected ways. Sometimes, 'real' life intrudes, but when I can write each morning, somehow that brings strength to face those other challenges that, much like plot twists, surprise us. Your story is brilliant and works on many levels. Somehow, I wanted Clara to surmount that toxic relationship that led her to commit such an heinous act. A life for a life, I guess. She didn't get to nurture that garden. Powerful stuff. And I will try to jump on the WEP Challenge. Welcome back!
Hi,
I felt so sorry for her. What a sad and terrible life she must have lived.
Thank you for bringing back the WEP for October. I hope it continues.
Shalom shalom
Thanks for your kind words, Pat. And thanks for writing for us again. Your stories are always relished by all. I do hope we can keep making special appearances in the future. We'll see.
Thanks Sonia. My pet hate.
Hmm. What scares you, huh?
I think A Caged Bird really lends itself to DV. Glad your story is coming!
Thanks Toi. Truth is scarier than fiction for sure. This is truth for far too many women.
Nice to meet you Gail. I haven't heard of those Hawaiian stories.. Must check them out.
Always.
Great to see you here, Lee. You're a hard woman to track down!
Thanks for your kind words and I'm glad I encouraged you in some small way. Early morning writing is cool, but I've never been able to make it work for me. Yeah, poor Clara, but there aren't too many happy endings for DV victims.
Thanks Rebecca. Glad you're going to post. I'll be waiting...
Dracula is well worth the read. I like my vampires classic, not a modern office worker type of thing. So many stories use the tropes from Dracula
And hi, how are you? Long time no see...
A rather intriguing read about the powers of guilt. Though I must admit the needle analogy, brought to mind drugs. To a point, it is inferred she caused him to overdose.
I love the old, Dracula style vampires too. They had character. Not like these angsty drama queens nowadays. Loved your story too. Yes, abuse leaves it own ghostly guilt, especially after escape of any circumstance. Engrosing story.
Very good story. I feel sorry for her, having to feel guilt. Punishment for doing what ought to be the right thing. Sadly, that's how it is.
I will be over tomorrow ... just very late - sorreeee - cheers Hilary
Thanks Jamie. I've learned that women always feel guilty about everything. Sadly.
I feel the same about modern vamps. Thanks for your kind words re my story. Super excited to see you here and writing for WEP this month.
It's just me. Getting back to the reading. Love is not the sun. It is the garden. Loved that. Also the 'bruised grey' of the sky. Your imagery is always so evocative and such a pleasure to read.
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