tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post7242710622417142508..comments2024-03-17T20:45:42.848+10:00Comments on Denise Covey: Romantic Suspense Group (#43) Getting-to-Know-You Blogfest. Short and sweet.Denise Covey http://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-8823461637743424812011-11-16T07:11:39.305+10:002011-11-16T07:11:39.305+10:00Glynis: Ah, those honeybees got some attention, no...Glynis: Ah, those honeybees got some attention, not all good, but...<br /><br />Samantha: Glad you like the name (so do I obviously) and I do so love American politics! I'm sure daddy doesn't know more than he wants to.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-23710519867493367922011-11-15T23:46:16.871+10:002011-11-15T23:46:16.871+10:00Shakira Pearlman! What an interesting name to go a...Shakira Pearlman! What an interesting name to go along with what sounds like a very interesting story! Love that her father is a Senator. I'm wondering what he thinks, if he knows, of her plans.Samantha VĂ©ranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07446488761214047647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-84728753230219149112011-11-15T18:57:52.370+10:002011-11-15T18:57:52.370+10:00You did well writing a pitch quickly! It read fine...You did well writing a pitch quickly! It read fine to me. I was a bit thrown by the honeybees, but intrigued at the same time. Good luck, Denise.Glynis Peters https://www.blogger.com/profile/01175378917872403609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-8180852871307442292011-11-15T12:09:31.674+10:002011-11-15T12:09:31.674+10:00Hi Kris:
Wow! Thank you for the critique of my dod...Hi Kris:<br />Wow! Thank you for the critique of my dodgy pitch. Well, said agent I hope would be intrigued enough to ask more questions, as you have. The honeybees definitely have a place and need to be in the pitch. I wrote this quickly for the blogfest and of course I will work on it more. I was waiting for a few more criticisms before I improve it.<br /><br />I really like your take on Detective Byron. Thank you!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-6281548294259190062011-11-15T11:53:42.118+10:002011-11-15T11:53:42.118+10:00I think you could basically cut this -- as she'...I think you could basically cut this -- as she's discovered she's not the rapist's first victim and fears she won't be his last. <br /><br />I don't need her reasoning, as I'm perfectly willing to accept that a rape victim would want revenge, and you already told us she did in the first sentence. Just go from "Shakira refuses to accept the status quo" to your next sentence "and pursues the rapist across the country."<br /><br />I was both intrigued and puzzled by the honeybees. I wondered if it were literal or metaphor/slang. I'd either cut the reference or add a more complete sentence that explains better. Since it is an unusual angle, keeping the mention would be good, though the pitch is still intriguing without it.<br /><br />This feels a little flat -- Her quest intensifies when she meets Detective Byron Bredemeier and falls in love. <br /><br />Is it really that easy? Typically romance novels have tension between the leads, and a woman who has been raped and then ignored by the police probably wouldn't be quick to trust men in general, or a detective in particular. (I'm assuming calling him simply "Detective" implies a member of some police force.)<br /><br />I don't know the details of your story, but maybe something along the lines of: "She really doesn't want help from Detective Byron Bredemeier, no matter how sexy he is, but he may be her only hope to find the rapist before he strikes again.<br /><br />Kris Bock<br />Rattled: romantic suspense in the dramatic and deadly New Mexico desert. <br />Read 3 chapters: www.krisbock.comKris Bockhttp://www.krisbock.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-42348815724897483402011-11-15T06:53:34.666+10:002011-11-15T06:53:34.666+10:00Ann: Thank you.
Joy: Yes that could be confusciou...Ann: Thank you.<br /><br />Joy: Yes that could be confuscious! She works in the bee industry and the beekeeper is the bad guy. <br /><br />Thanks. Just downloaded my copy of Hardware!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-74959369757537041532011-11-15T02:40:57.906+10:002011-11-15T02:40:57.906+10:00That novel set in Afghanistan sounds like an inter...That novel set in Afghanistan sounds like an interesting one. Interesting pitch too that makes me want to check out the story. Not too sure about the honeybees. I don't think I got that. Is that about the other victims or is that a colloquialism? Flying by now, but will send you my thoughts on the pitch later. <br /><br />Thanks for the mention on Hardware. You won one of the copies ya know.J.L. Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05666634455836834179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-4612278695984266412011-11-15T00:19:32.449+10:002011-11-15T00:19:32.449+10:00Great pitch, my friend. And I love the title, In S...Great pitch, my friend. And I love the title, In Search of the Last Cowboy. I'm really anxious to read this one!!<br /><a href="http://anncarbinebest.com/" rel="nofollow"><i>Ann Best, Author of In the Mirror, A Memoir of Shattered Secrets</i></a>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-73104707479972882212011-11-14T14:56:57.766+10:002011-11-14T14:56:57.766+10:00Nas, thanks!
DeniseNas, thanks!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-67993217705929219422011-11-14T14:47:08.147+10:002011-11-14T14:47:08.147+10:00Oh Yes! Like the sound of your story!Oh Yes! Like the sound of your story!Nashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14984530648140460594noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-38070370258992203592011-11-14T14:14:26.983+10:002011-11-14T14:14:26.983+10:00Romance Reader: Thank you!
DeniseRomance Reader: Thank you!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-11125501306093137972011-11-14T13:30:07.521+10:002011-11-14T13:30:07.521+10:00Denise, love the sound of your novel! Would defini...Denise, love the sound of your novel! Would definitely read it! <br /><br />All the best!Romance Reader https://www.blogger.com/profile/10633164931292182035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-10919110555288404212011-11-14T06:45:10.978+10:002011-11-14T06:45:10.978+10:00L Diane Wolfe: Well life happens.
DeniseL Diane Wolfe: Well life happens.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-19242862565693557232011-11-14T05:41:31.455+10:002011-11-14T05:41:31.455+10:00Sounds intense. You know, I've never even watc...Sounds intense. You know, I've never even watched the movie The Accused due to the intense subject matter. Too sensitive.L. Diane Wolfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06425864276166334896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-46357652280144761112011-11-13T22:33:19.605+10:002011-11-13T22:33:19.605+10:00Carole Anne: I'd be interested to hear more ab...Carole Anne: I'd be interested to hear more about your grown-up novel.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-19274748336374763872011-11-13T21:59:12.762+10:002011-11-13T21:59:12.762+10:00Loved the sound of this, would love to have the ti...Loved the sound of this, would love to have the time to join in. You've made me think - this grown-up novel I'm writing ... what is it? Romance, fantasy, farce.... have to sort that out! You seem much better organised.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07957545161716269528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-50131108027342854642011-11-13T21:21:44.577+10:002011-11-13T21:21:44.577+10:00Sarah: Thank you. I just need to finish editing it...Sarah: Thank you. I just need to finish editing it and many other projects. How's NaNo?<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-68224418739984690692011-11-13T20:06:58.146+10:002011-11-13T20:06:58.146+10:00Denise, I love the pitch of your novel. It definit...Denise, I love the pitch of your novel. It definitely sounds like one I would read :-)Sarah Tokeleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13273148070092101085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-28698650929294714912011-11-13T13:05:11.841+10:002011-11-13T13:05:11.841+10:00Hi Kittie. You're definitely so sweet. It'...Hi Kittie. You're definitely so sweet. It'll be great to know I can come to you to get my facts/expressions right and yes, I know you're a straight shooter.<br /><br />And the Aussies have just let the Yanks set up a new military base in Darwin. Not sure what that means yet but I'm sure I'll work it out. It is a strategic spot, wide open...<br /><br />I'm glad you like the sound of my tale...<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-27241161321090668952011-11-13T12:17:54.382+10:002011-11-13T12:17:54.382+10:00Denise, please feel free to e-mail me at anytime a...Denise, please feel free to e-mail me at anytime at kittiehoward@gmail.com. You know me, I'll give you honest answers about our culture. I really, really do think you've got a great story in the making. I'll be more than happy to lend a Yank informational hand. We LOVE the Aussies here and want only the best for you. Don't hesitate, girl!!!!!<br /><br />And thanks for your support of Remy. I'm truly touched! (Okay, I'm super sensitive. *sighs*<br /><br />(Also, my former roommate from Okinawa days lives in MA so I can easily cross-check any questions you might have about that region. It's a bit different up there, again a bit tricky. But Pauline's a native and will tell it like it is. Please don't hesitate to asks!!!)Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-71056021911437366042011-11-13T11:08:30.160+10:002011-11-13T11:08:30.160+10:00Kittie: Thanks for that lesson. These are the fine...Kittie: Thanks for that lesson. These are the finer points I need to adjust. I might come by to ask you some more!<br /><br />Alex: Well plenty of us do and it works for us! Isn't it nice that we're all so unique! I think it is.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-14938699050273136402011-11-13T09:47:54.120+10:002011-11-13T09:47:54.120+10:00I still can't imagine writing a book without a...I still can't imagine writing a book without an outline...Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7362528912516506170.post-29171649197783921442011-11-13T09:27:55.663+10:002011-11-13T09:27:55.663+10:00Ohhh, but this sounds like fun, but don't know...Ohhh, but this sounds like fun, but don't know right now. "Remy Broussard's Christmas" is climbing in the charts - I'm excited beyond words - and must thank those who've purchased a copy.<br /><br />I loved your rapist angle - the approach works, except for one minor detail - we use "American" as an adjective (because it's impossible to turn United States into an adjective) but refer to our country, most of the time (this gets really tricky, difficult to translate; Canadians are also Americans, as are those in South America - sheesh! really tricky) as the United States or the States. Maybe it's just me, but if she pursued him across the United States or across the country (probably better, actually, as we know what this means) it would have appeared more native-born. Anyway, I think you've got a winner here.Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.com