ON WRITING

“It’s very easy to quit during the first ten years of writing. Nobody cares whether you write or not, and it’s very hard to write when nobody cares one way or the other. You can’t get fired if you don’t write, and most of the time you don’t get rewarded if you do. But don’t quit.” Andre Dubus

Friday, 24 August 2012

Romantic Friday Writers - Challenge No 43 - The Romantic Picnic.


The RomanticFridayWriters bi-monthly challenge this week is 'The Romantic Picnic.  I'm writing a sequel to my previous Challenge, I Need a Change, with the setting in a romantic paradise, based on a real island in Fiji. If you didn't catch my story you can read it here. The challenges are open to all writers of prose or poetry.

Here are the guidelines for this challenge:

The "Romantic Picnic."  

- Who initiates the picnic; is this a first date or dedication to the continuing relationship? 

- Is there an agenda to the picnic: marriage proposal, pregnancy announcement, promotion or new job assignment? 

 - is the picnic all about the continuing romantic relationship: one lover affirming their devotion to the other, or a mutually shared, opportune moment of togetherness?  

***Any genre, any POV; just remember to include a romantic element and a picnic, in 400 words or less.***



Back to the Island

Inya spread the mat on the lush grass, watching how the palm tree shadows painted pictures with the midday light. Squinting into the sun, he remembered a day just like this, six months ago. Their last picnic.

Joy spiked his heart just thinking of her. From the night she’d tripped over his fishing line, to the day she’d left on the boat, they’d been inseparable. What a week that’d been! She’d promised to come back, but he’d been afraid to hope.  

She was here! He’d seen her boat come in. Afraid to meet it, he’d decided to wait for her to find him. That’d mean she really wanted him. She was good at tracking him down. 

Wherever he was, she’d find him.

He opened the hotel picnic basket. The hotel staff loved Sally. Said she was perfect for him. They’d given him all these goodies and a bottle of chilled champagne.

He lifted the plates out of their plastic bindings and set them out side by side. Then he reached for the cutlery and napkins. Pretty fancy!

Before getting out the delicious-looking sandwiches and papaya salad, he picked some gorgeous red ginger flowers from a nearby bush. He filled a plastic tumbler with fresh water and set them in the middle of the mat. 

He checked the sun. She should be here any minute. Just thinking about her made him hot. He threw off his tee shirt and dived into the water. Ah, cool! He was so nervous he was as stiff as a board. He started to swim out to the islands in long, lazy strokes, luxuriating in the glorious feeling of soft water flowing around him. He rolled onto his back and looked at the cloudless blue sky.

‘Inya!’

Sally’s here!

Splashing madly like a kid learning to swim, he looked towards the shore. There she was, running into the water, throwing off her clothes as she ran. 

In a few strokes they were all arms and legs and gulping water, gabbling nonsense. He pulled her close and kissed her, and kissed her...

‘I love you Inya.’

‘I love you Sally. I’m never letting you off this island without me again.’

‘I’m never leaving without you.’

‘Hungry?’

‘Starving. Do I detect a picnic under a tree?’

‘You do.’

‘How romantic. Do you have kava?’

‘Nah. The hotel sent champagne.’

‘I’m more of a kava girl.’

‘I know. Just wait till tonight.’


WORD COUNT: 404
FCA


UPCOMING RFW CHALLENGES:

Challenge #44 -  Sept 7 -  I Should Have Kissed You  FW/RunnerUp
Challenge #45 -  Sept 21 -Oh How I Hate My Beautiful Friend
Challenge #46 -  Oct 5   -  Birthday Madness 
Challenge #47 -  Oct 19 -  Halloween – House of Horrors FW/RunnerUp

Like to read more RFW posts on The Romantic Picnic. Go to RomanticFridayWriters for the list...

 




58 comments:

  1. the islands get in your bones and your stories, don't they.
    nice.

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    1. They do Raelene! Plenty more where that came from lol!

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  2. Love this. You pulled me right in. All the senses were used. You did a fine job here. Mine is a midnight picnic. What a concept right? :-)

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    1. I'd expect nothing less of you Roland,my friend.

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  3. Ha! Something about picnics and the beach inspires nudity :) I did that too. These two make my heart race :)

    ......dhole

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    1. After reading yours it looks like we colluded! 'Cept mine is young love...D

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  4. Romantic alright! Sensual and sweet.

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  5. I love the sun and the sand, stories with these elements touch my heart. Liked your story, a lot.

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    1. Thanks for visiting Sulekkha and for your lovely comment.

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  6. Ah, the promise of champagne. So romantic, a lovely read.

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    1. What could be better than a bottle of crisp champers at the beach? Hmm...

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  7. You're an island girl now, sis. Beautifully written! Just--perfect!!

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  8. Thank you for bringing a reminder of sunny days on the beach. Lovely.

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    1. So Suzanne, I wonder what weather you're having ATM?

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  9. Glad she returned to this romantic haven. Inya is a true romantic with all those special touches,such as the ginger flowers.

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    1. Yeah, you must have the ginger flowers. They're everywhere.

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  10. So lovely, could feel all the longing for this one special moment that makesthe wait of the last six months worth it.

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  11. Hi,

    Hee hee, in the noddy, sun sea and sand, and I loved the flower aspect! What could be better for a romantic picnic. Great! ;)

    best
    F

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    1. Yes, quite the little scene. We say 'nuddy', lol!

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  12. Dear Denise,
    What a lovely Happy End! I wish I could have hid in your pocket when you went to Fiji to see what it's like!

    I love the description of the beach, the flowers and picnic spread! When I rewrite my story I plan to write more about food!

    What fun that they got together in the end.

    Best wishes,
    Anna
    RFW No.43 - 'Romantic Picnic'

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    1. Ah Anna,nothing like being in a place to be inspired by what you see and the people you meet.

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  13. So lovely to experience the chemistry between this couple thru' your eyes/lens, Denise. I knew she'd be back and I'm glad she is:)

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    1. Ah thanks Adura! That means a lot coming from you.

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  14. Everything you wrote is specially nice. Kiss Elen

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  15. Hi Denise
    Oh, I was worried for awhile thinking she'd stand him up. Great description and hold your breath anticipation.
    Nancy

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  16. Beautiful Denise! Very heartwarming and romantic. I'm glad she came back

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    1. You and me both Heather. This story isn't finished yet. D

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  17. Congratulations Denise! You got your 20 participants!
    Anna
    oxox

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    1. Thanks Anna. That's mainly thanks to Andy's efforts but I like to think I found one extra in the lovely Michael! D

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    2. Yeah Andy did a great one indeed :)

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  18. My dear Denise,
    For me, romance is beautiful anywhere (smile). I could feel the passion and love between them. You made the ending sweet enough for your readers to feel the magic!! Great job my dear.

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    1. Thanks Andy. I know you'll always be a good judge of romance! D

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  19. Hi, Denise,

    Loved the part where you start him off taking long, lazy strokes, only to finish off flopping around like a kid learning to swim. Ah, love, it turns even the coolest of dudes into an awkward teenage boy.

    Inya is such a romantic. It's nice to see a real man who knows how to act like a real man.


    Well, I DID IT! I spent a few hours last night and a few this morning to have it posted by this morning. I can't wait to see what you think.

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    1. Hi Michael. I was hoping someone would comment on that swim part as I thought long and hard about my simile there. I could just imagine it.

      I'm so glad you worked on your story for us! Maybe it's the start of something good! Can't wait to read it.

      Denise

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  20. Fancy picnics are my kind of picnics and islands are such beautiful romantic settings. this is a feel good story.

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  21. I'm so glad these two found their way to each other again - very passionate love!

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  22. I love how you continued on with the last challenge!! I knew from the last challenge that Sally really didn't want to go.. I could just feel her heart breaking and Inya's as well! This was absolutely amazing!

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  23. Now there's a man who's invested in his relationship. I couldn't help cheering for him and wishing that things would work out just the way he wants them to. Good imagery. I could visualize their surroundings.

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  24. Dear Denise,i loved seeing the next part and feeling such reunion of the two souls where they became one under the warmth of the sun and the sea witnessing their meeting and the waves playing their song :),i really enjoyed it

    Thanks for such share and for your kind follow to me :))))

    p.s : for the challenge no, 46 : birthday madness on the 5th october,i cant wait for it

    actually my birthday will be on the 2nd of october,so i guess i will wait and will write about the madness of such coming day when it comes,:)))))

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    1. So you share a birthday month with your hosts, which is why we thought of the birthday prompt. It'll be such fun!
      Glad you like my story.

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    2. Cerrainly your words are inspiring to me
      I loved it with all its parts

      For the birthday yeah im thinking of doing something diffeeent which is.not to be depressed for a change :)))

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  25. As always, very nice imagery and scene setting. Maybe she should have accepted the champagne since he was so attentive.

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    1. I'm sure she did accept it, but wasn't really a champagne girl.

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  26. Love Inya's determination to put his future with Sally in the hands of fate by waiting for her to find him, and how it works!

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  27. Dear Denise,
    Back for a second reading. When you said last week yours would be on your island, I was wondering if the dreaded kava would make an appearance. I see you managed to incorporate it! LOL

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  28. Aw, this is wonderful! I love that you wrote the sequel!!

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    1. Thanks Lynda. There's more to come...

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  29. Ah, Fiji! Sounds romantic to me, Denise.

    Plus I'm intrigue about that "Wait till tonight" last line!

    Jai

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  30. Hmm. So am I. Just wait til next Friday...

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